You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.
Write a letter to your friend. In your letter,
give details of your study plans
explain why you want to get a part-time job
suggest how your friend could help you find a job
Dear Sandra,
Hope you are doing well at your end. I would like to inform you that I got an admission in London School of Business in the 1 year MBA program and will be travelling to London in the first week of August. I am so happy and glad that we shall be living in the same city.
I would like to seek some help on the part-time jobs which are available for students. I would like to work part-time to run my daily expenses in London. I have heard that London is an expensive city. Part-time work will be useful not only to earn some bucks but also it will help to build my own network in the society.
When I was reading the university manual, I found that part-time jobs are available for students in the university website by login in the details such as name and mobile number. Unfortunately, I do not have a local mobile number yet in London and I can only take a sim card once I enter the country. I suggest you to please create an account in the university website with your number on my behalf and this would help in searching for a part-time job in the university campus.
See you soon
Ali
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e shall be living in the same city. I would like to seek some help on the par...
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Line 5, column 88, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... jobs which are available for students. I would like to work part-time to run my ...
^
Line 5, column 155, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ime to run my daily expenses in London. I have heard that London is an expensive ...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, so, well, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 906.0 937.175257732 97% => OK
No of words: 213.0 206.0 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.25352112676 4.54256449028 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82027741392 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36024663503 2.54303337028 93% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 127.690721649 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558685446009 0.622605031667 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 292.5 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5780885274 44.8134815571 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.3636363636 76.5299724578 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3636363636 16.8248392259 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.18181818182 4.34317383033 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281431998151 0.216113520407 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10965025005 0.0766984524023 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793987124787 0.0603063233224 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171949138987 0.12726935374 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327865441236 0.0580467560999 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 8.37731958763 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 70.7449484536 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 7.45979381443 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.37 8.71597938144 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 7.59969072165 93% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 41.2886597938 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 8.62886597938 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.