You are going on a short course to a training college abroad It is a college that you have not been to before Write a letter to the accommodation officer In your letter give details of your course and your arrival departure date explain your accommodation | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is a college that you have not been to before.
Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter,
• give details of your course and your arrival/departure date
• explain your accommodation needs
• ask for information about getting to and from the college

Dear Sir,
I am Mr Shreyas Parab, from India. I have applied for Data Analysis Courses at Toronto university. As per my admit card received, the course commences on 10th May and will end by December. I am arriving on 5th May and will be leaving back by the end of December, as per completion.

From May till December, that is for eight months, I need an accommodation within the university premises. I am looking for single sharing or no sharing rooms, apart from that, the internet connection without any interruptions. I would prefer staying away from the noisy place, as it would distract my studies and sleep schedules. If the accommodation inside university premises is not available by any chance, I request to provide a recommendation of favourable places to stay outside the university.

I will disembark at Toronto International Airport at 8.00 pm, needed some information about the travel arrangements to college. Since it would be night until I reach the university, and as I would not be having activated cellular network, what documents would I need to carry to clear the university security without any problems? If any help is needed, how can I get the assistance?

I am looking forward to your reply.

Yours faithfully,
Shreyas Parab

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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS General Training

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 58, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'accommodation'.
Suggestion: accommodation
...ember, that is for eight months, I need an accommodation within the university premises. I am lo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, may, so, apart from

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 4.92783505155 284% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1056.0 937.175257732 113% => OK
No of words: 211.0 206.0 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00473933649 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0156856542 2.54303337028 119% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 127.690721649 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625592417062 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 326.7 290.88556701 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 1.83505154639 327% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5044077889 44.8134815571 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.2307692308 76.5299724578 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2307692308 16.8248392259 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.23076923077 4.34317383033 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0921323549603 0.216113520407 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0417094604358 0.0766984524023 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534185522653 0.0603063233224 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0623420639181 0.12726935374 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0514172745062 0.0580467560999 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 8.37731958763 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 70.7449484536 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 8.71597938144 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 7.59969072165 113% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 41.2886597938 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 8.62886597938 81% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, may, so, apart from

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments