You are not happy with the course you are doing at college and would like to change to a different course.
Write a letter to the Head of Department to change your course. In your letter explain:
what course are you doing now
why you are not satisfied with that course
what course would you like to change to
Dear Mr Cameron,
I am a first-year student at your college and my major is arts. I am writing to seek your permission to change one of my courses. I am hoping that you would allow me to do so.
My student identification number is 254102. During my admission back in January, I took the music course and it has been a month since then. So far I am not happy with my progress and I am confident that I would do better if I take the history curriculum, which I have always felt passionate about. I would not say that I feel negative about my music classes, but I believe I should go with the course I feel more attached to.
When I got admitted to the college, no seat in the history department was available and the music was my second preference. Recently, I talked to the dean of the history department and he notified that with your permission, I would be able to intake the history subject.
I would request you to permit me to intake history course and drop the music class. I would be always grateful to you for granting me to switch my course.
Yours sincerely,
Caterina Holmes
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 131, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...permission to change one of my courses. I am hoping that you would allow me to do...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, then, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 32.9175257732 131% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 899.0 937.175257732 96% => OK
No of words: 204.0 206.0 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4068627451 4.54256449028 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60461155369 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 127.690721649 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558823529412 0.622605031667 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 282.6 290.88556701 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2607911563 44.8134815571 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.9166666667 76.5299724578 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 16.8248392259 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 4.34317383033 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243536731363 0.216113520407 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0915504333423 0.0766984524023 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060701893061 0.0603063233224 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14994164117 0.12726935374 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700927031977 0.0580467560999 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 8.37731958763 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.0 8.71597938144 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 7.59969072165 95% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 64.606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.75 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.