You are not satisfied with the changing rooms in a sports centre that you visit Write a letter to the manager What the problem is How you feel about the problem What steps you want the manager to take

Essay topics:

You are not satisfied with the changing rooms in a sports centre that you visit. Write a letter to the manager:

What the problem is
How you feel about the problem
What steps you want the manager to take

Dear Mr. Singh,

My name is Harpreet, and i am a prime member of your sports centre for the last two months. I am writing this to express my dissatisfaction with the changing rooms facility at your sports centre. Although this establishment has all the required amenities such as, the vast range of equipment, plenty of space for all the sports activities and of course well-trained coaches, which are picture-perfect, changing area, on the other hand, is not only quite congested. but also messy and unhygienic, as often people leave their wet towels and dirty shoes on the floors rather than putting them into their lockers.

Furthermore, the floor always remains wet and slippery as people often walkout from the shower completely damp without wearing any slippers. This can be dangerous as anyone can slip and break their bones. I feel that these unhygienic practices can cause several health issues, and i do not feel using these changing rooms ever.

I would like to request you to put some signboards mentioning some strict instructions that contain rules and regulations to be followed while using these restrooms in order to maintain cleanliness, and further train your cleaning staff to constantly observe floors and dry them as soon as they are wet.

Thank you for considering my request in advance.

Yours sincerely
Harpreet

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
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Suggestion: But
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...es can cause several health issues, and i do not feel using these changing rooms ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, so, well, while, i feel, of course, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1135.0 937.175257732 121% => OK
No of words: 221.0 206.0 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13574660633 4.54256449028 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75700432882 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 127.690721649 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.678733031674 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 324.9 290.88556701 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.463917525773 862% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.2246443231 44.8134815571 190% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.5 76.5299724578 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1 16.8248392259 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6 4.34317383033 198% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118417668508 0.216113520407 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0450954425937 0.0766984524023 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475684991044 0.0603063233224 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0774708799867 0.12726935374 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344957046998 0.0580467560999 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 8.37731958763 165% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 70.7449484536 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 8.71597938144 144% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 41.2886597938 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 8.62886597938 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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