You have just returned home after living with a family in an English-speaking country for six months. You now realize that you left a small bag of personal possessions in your room. Write to the family describing the things you left behind. Ask them to se

Essay topics:

You have just returned home after living with a family in an English-speaking country for six months. You now realize that you left a small bag of personal possessions in your room. Write to the family describing the things you left behind. Ask them to send some or all of them to you. Offer to cover the coasts.

Mr. and Mrs. hooper,

I hope you are well. The flight seemed long to home, but all family were waiting me at the airport which was great. Thank you so much for having me – I enjoyed my time with you.
I have a favor to ask you. When I returned home I realized that I forgot my old bag. You may recall the new bag which I bought while I was in Sydney. I am sure that I left it under the bed.
I do not need the bag, but some thinks have a sentimental value for me. I would be grateful if you could send them me by post. There is small wallet with some photos, silver necklace and red address book. None of other things are important. Could you please let me know how much the postage is and I will send you the money to cover the coast.
Looking forward to hearing from you and thank you once again for your help.
Love to all the family.
Mehriban.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 27, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e with you. I have a favor to ask you. When I returned home I realized that I forgo...
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Line 5, column 72, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...thinks have a sentimental value for me. I would be grateful if you could send the...
^

Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'so', 'well', 'while']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.17277486911 0.220444632235 78% => OK
Verbs: 0.183246073298 0.167888034529 109% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0680628272251 0.0606518309736 112% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0366492146597 0.0506257000042 72% => OK
Pronouns: 0.17277486911 0.118615021944 146% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0785340314136 0.107062808482 73% => OK
Participles: 0.020942408377 0.041066498444 51% => OK
Conjunctions: 1.91337377131 2.54303337028 75% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0261780104712 0.0385302599488 68% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00132118243153 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0732984293194 0.0714148451538 103% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0261780104712 0.0191574576366 137% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.020942408377 0.00930345855455 225% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 856.0 1141.60824742 75% => OK
No of words: 172.0 206.134020619 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97674418605 5.53046319177 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.78085437643 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.191860465116 0.284621296913 67% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.110465116279 0.211203875043 52% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.0406976744186 0.133321485273 31% => More words length more than 7 chars wanted.
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0174418604651 0.0843313296314 21% => More words length more than 8 chars wanted.
Word Length SD: 1.91337377131 2.54303337028 75% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 127.690721649 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.674418604651 0.622163163488 108% => OK
Word variations: 69.8089672715 62.8969750728 111% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 12.9587628866 116% => OK
Sentence length: 11.4666666667 16.4300151701 70% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.0551391934 44.7399317507 56% => OK
Chars per sentence: 57.0666666667 90.9928171075 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 11.4666666667 16.4300151701 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.466666666667 0.613754768223 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.09278350515 96% => OK
Readability: 22.5131782946 37.5504026743 60% => OK
Elegance: 0.693333333333 1.13073093955 61% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.439919818111 0.331212695627 133% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0394901933638 0.0927372745006 43% => Sentence sentence coherence is low.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0442629421518 0.0736520305886 60% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.514448396803 0.579516596996 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.230513061378 0.180689518051 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141694821731 0.122183219658 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0822880009452 0.0765303033291 108% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.148312191349 0.211926503985 70% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0559109364985 0.0737400523855 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257460725954 0.203819188451 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474948068706 0.067151250289 71% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.45360824742 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.48453608247 0% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.0206185567 99% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 4.73195876289 190% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 1.03092783505 0% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.56701030928 117% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 8.32989690722 144% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.