You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to study/work.Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter:describe the

Essay topics:

You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to study/work.

Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter:

describe the situation

explain your problems and why it is difficult to study/work

say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

You should write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am joe, second year law student and I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction with the accommodation provided for me by the university.

The college sheltered me in the Serenity hostels, where i share the room with the senior scholar called john who is in the final semester and his annoying behaviour makesa lot of distractions which are affecting my academics.

To brief, john is inviting people to our living space and have parties frequently,even the week just before the exams. I tried to convince him, hoping that he will consider my request, but the things get worsened and resulted in lack of concentration in studies and project works.

Overseeing in to the adverse events happening,I appeal to issue me a quieter place to reside, in which can focus on my assignments and learning.

I do apologise for any inconvenience caused. Thanking you for all the help and support offered.

Yours Sincerely,

joe

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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Dear Sir/Madam, I am joe, second year law student and I ...
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... university. The college sheltered me in the Serenity hostels, where i shar...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
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...ered me in the Serenity hostels, where i share the room with the senior scholar ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...th the senior scholar called john who is in the final semester and his annoying b...
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...living space and have parties frequently,even the week just before the exams. I tried...
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...eeing in to the adverse events happening,I appeal to issue me a quieter place to r...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...pport offered. Yours Sincerely, joe
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, second

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 820.0 937.175257732 87% => OK
No of words: 158.0 206.0 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18987341772 4.54256449028 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.54539209256 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01377492334 2.54303337028 119% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.715189873418 0.622605031667 115% => OK
syllable_count: 243.9 290.88556701 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.0232002742 44.8134815571 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.5 76.5299724578 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 16.8248392259 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.375 4.34317383033 32% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15704117112 0.216113520407 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0493604528154 0.0766984524023 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493241639146 0.0603063233224 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0720553130348 0.12726935374 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452341445927 0.0580467560999 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 8.37731958763 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 8.71597938144 147% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 7.59969072165 127% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 41.2886597938 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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