You visited a museum recently with an elderly relative However he or she had difficulty walking around the museum Write a letter to the manager and say Whom did you visit the museum with What problems did he or she face Suggest a solution that will improv | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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You visited a museum recently with an elderly relative. However, he or she had difficulty walking around the museum. Write a letter to the manager and say :

Whom did you visit the museum with?
What problems did he or she face?
Suggest a solution that will improve the museum visit experience for elder people.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing with regard to my recent visit to your museum last week on Saturday. I was accompanied by my uncle who is a senior citizen and 70 years of age. Moreover, he has arthritis, hence he needs continuous support of a walking stick. However, his enthusiasm and spirit to gain knowledge about new things are undeterred.

Let me elaborate more on the overall experience. Firstly, the entire tour of the art gallery was very pleasant. Despite, being 95 years old, the heritage is well maintained. However, there is no provision for elderly people's comfort. A total of 1000 sq. ft stretch along with 3 floors is suitable for youngsters but it becomes difficult for people with disabilities. My uncle felt breathless after walking for half an hour and therefore we could not cover the top floor art.

I request you to take certain measures to make it a favorable experience for every age group. A couple of suggestions from my end include the provision of wheelchairs from the entrance which can facilitate long-distance without exertion for older people. Furthermore, if possible, please construct lifts so that every individual can take a view of each and every corner of the museum.

Hope my feedback will be put to action in the future.

Yours faithfully,
Dimple Patel

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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS General Training

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Essay evaluations by e-grader

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 32.9175257732 58% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1090.0 937.175257732 116% => OK
No of words: 221.0 206.0 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93212669683 4.54256449028 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80174915458 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 127.690721649 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.737556561086 0.622605031667 118% => OK
syllable_count: 333.0 290.88556701 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6804123711 126% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.6321812937 44.8134815571 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.125 76.5299724578 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.8125 16.8248392259 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 4.34317383033 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145433997607 0.216113520407 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0358489720823 0.0766984524023 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051152591624 0.0603063233224 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0772213181169 0.12726935374 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552802550846 0.0580467560999 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 8.37731958763 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 70.7449484536 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.72 8.71597938144 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 7.59969072165 116% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 41.2886597938 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Essay evaluations by e-grader

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments