You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town.Write a letter to the shop1- ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them.2- Ask what the prices are3- how long they will be able to hold the goods f

Essay topics:

You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town.
Write a letter to the shop
1- ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them.
2- Ask what the prices are
3- how long they will be able to hold the goods for you

Dear David,
My name is john Dawson, I am a regular customer of your shop. I want to know whether your shop have items like a Sony LED TV remote, dry cleaner and an oven if not order it soon because I will be there next week to receive it.

can you please tell me the prices of all the items as I have to bring the amount with me. I am sure you are the best shop in the town with marketed products but do assure me the exact price along with GST and delivery charges.

I will be coming next week at night 10 o' clock to your shop to pick all the items that I have ordered to you. can you keep the shop open till that item as I will return back with those items. please arrange someone to keep the items carefully in the van and come along with me to show the way.
I hope you will arrange these as soon as possible.
Yours sincerely,
john.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Can
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Suggestion: Can
...l the items that I have ordered to you. can you keep the shop open till that item a...
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Message: Use simply 'return'.
Suggestion: return
... the shop open till that item as I will return back with those items. please arrange someon...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Please
...as I will return back with those items. please arrange someone to keep the items caref...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 678.0 937.175257732 72% => OK
No of words: 172.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 3.94186046512 4.54256449028 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 1.83959956374 2.54303337028 72% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 127.690721649 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610465116279 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 216.0 290.88556701 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0955648543 44.8134815571 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.3333333333 76.5299724578 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1111111111 16.8248392259 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.22222222222 4.34317383033 28% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19165704374 0.216113520407 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0826097846353 0.0766984524023 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642919618661 0.0603063233224 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123963659932 0.12726935374 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0206586941847 0.0580467560999 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.7 8.37731958763 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 70.7449484536 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 5.57 8.71597938144 64% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.32 7.59969072165 83% => OK
difficult_words: 19.0 41.2886597938 46% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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