4 Many high street shops have gone out of business in recent years Why do you think this has happened Is it a positive or negative development

Essay topics:

4. Many high street shops have gone out of business in recent years. Why do you think this has happened? Is it a positive or negative development?

It is true that some stores or even big shopping malls went break recently because of a variety of factors. In my opinion, the disappearing of physic shopping streets is tragic and will bring many negative consequences.

There are three main reasons why the high street shop is hard to survive in today’s market. Firstly, I reckon that the competition from online shop websites impacts the overturn from the sales in stores. People, especially the young generation are accustomed to compare, select and buy things on the websites, so they are reluctant to go the traditional brick-and-mortar stores. Secondly, increasing customers are interested in unique stuff which are normally not stocked in the high streets, but you can search online without geographic limitations. Finally, the ridiculously high rent for the physic stores cuts the shrinking profits which worsens the owners’ financial situation.

It seems to me that development is not a good thing for society and individuals. Thousands of people who were working as salesmen in stores would lose their jobs and the unemployment rate would surge to a high point. In this case, society may face serious social problems, such as a high crime rate, a huge financial burden for supporting jobless people and fewer taxes incomes. On the other hand, shopping malls can also provide people with a place to hang out with friends or to relax in a café. People can buy whatever they need online but they still need high streets in their city for other entertainment purposes.

In conclusion, there are different factors may cause stores going bankrupt and I think this can trigger many potential problems.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 166, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ition from online shop websites impacts the overturn from the sales in stores. People, espec...
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Line 3, column 249, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[4]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'accustomed to comparing'.
Suggestion: accustomed to comparing
...le, especially the young generation are accustomed to compare, select and buy things on the websites,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, i reckon, i think, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1399.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14338235294 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75914402613 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 415.8 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.4215394973 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 107.615384615 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9230769231 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3846153846 7.06120827912 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199103725261 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645287092244 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461929470238 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114521718252 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.024425664194 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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