Governments around the world spend too much money on treating illnesses and diseases and not enough on health education and prevention.
Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
The emerging of numerous diseases and illnesses recently has caused governments to spend a considerable amount of health budgets for treatment immediately, hence overlooking the significance of education and prevention. In my opinion, I firmly support the idea that governments should allocate more financial resources to preventing rather than curing.
Strong preparation can stop any unwanted outbreaks of diseases. In this regard, governments play a vital role in educating their citizens about leading healthy lives through sufficient campaigns. If the governments failed to do so, whenever there would be a sudden epidemic, it would adversely affect the whole population due to lacking backup methods. A particularly striking example for this would be the US government at the beginning of the Corona pandemic, if the government had prepared and alerted the citizens in advance, the US would have not been the leader in the number of death when COVID-19 stroke the country.
Excellent health education can prolong humans’ life expectancy. In other words, when the younger generation can comprehend the importance of eating hygienic food and living healthy lives, their lifespans would extend as long as they continue keeping the habits. In fact, this practice has been proven effective since humans are now expected to live until the age of 80 as a minimum. This can not be achieved with only the help of modern and advanced treatment, but also the education about the benefits of living healthy.
Admittedly, people sometimes do not care about the consequences of their actions. Some people would continue to use cigarettes despite knowing how negatively it would cause lung cancer. However, governments can put a halt to this by enacting stricter legislation to limit the amount of smoke production. Moreover, individual also has a role in encouraging their relatives to stay away from unhealthy habits such as smoking. Therefore, with the joint effort of governments and individuals, humans can live in a healthier society.
To recapitulate, I strongly believe that substantial preparation and outstanding education trumps effective treatments by any means. From this perspective, both governments and individuals play an essential role in preventing and educating to reach the result of a better living condition, where diseases and illnesses would be minimized as much as possible.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, in fact, such as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2027.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 371.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46361185984 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99932788658 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595687331536 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0525581339 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.235294118 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8235294118 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41176470588 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195497988949 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0605329740605 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525938149831 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116424492189 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430073345363 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.74 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 78.4519038076 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, in fact, such as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2027.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 371.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46361185984 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99932788658 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595687331536 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0525581339 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.235294118 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8235294118 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41176470588 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195497988949 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0605329740605 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525938149831 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116424492189 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430073345363 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.74 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 78.4519038076 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.