he government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to reduce the amount of violent crimes in the society. Do you agree or disagree?
The crime rate is now one of the most controversial issues that people like debating about. Because, the crime rate have been rising up increasingly. Thus, some people assume that the reason why the crime rate increases is the violent media, such as film, drama, animation etc. I partially agree about this opinion.
To begin with, we were exposed to numerous violent medias since we were a kids. It is fairly easy to find violent medias in TV, movie and especially through the website. Furthermore, although the age requirements exist on medias, kids can find plenty of violent videos without any difficulty and they are exposed to those medias. This problem will enable kids to ignore and to be insensitive about this problem. Thus, it is naturally seen that tons of violent medias promote the crime rate to grow . For that reasons, many parents believe that the government should prohibit broadcasting not to provide a large amount of violent videos.
Meanwhile, there are also some people who disagree about this opinion. Because, although the kids are exposed to violent media, most kids hardly follow videos. In addition, they announced that the reason why the crime rate goes up is not the violent medias, but the education. Therefore, the governments should change the method of education rather than prohibiting children to watch violent videos. They believe that we have to teach children about right and wrong by good education system. Moreover, prohibiting broadcasting to produce various video, it might bring other the worse problem, such as depression of media's advance.
In conclusion, even though there are a lot of disadvantages, I agree that the government should control the amount of violence partially. Because, it is true that the violent medias exert a negative influence on children. In addition, the government should strengthen punishment about age requirement.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21967213115 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68488267618 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534426229508 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.6488466431 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.7894736842 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0526315789 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05263157895 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 18.0 3.9879759519 451% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206362923036 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655942280407 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0691573836575 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143385191429 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0672252332871 0.056905535591 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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