The increase in the production of consumer goods result in damage to natural environment. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem?
Many detrimental impacts have been left on the natural environment due to the mass manufacturing process of consumer goods. In the scope of this essay, several related reasons are addressed and a few solutions are suggested to tackle this issue.
Industrialised wastes are main causes of global warming and pollution. Gas emission as a result of burning fossil fuels such as coal and oil to generate energy for production leads to such dramatic increase of carbon dioxide that the air is severely polluted. Moreover, this dangerous gas also weaken the ozone layer which act as a shield to protect our planet from radiation and heat from the sun. Hence, more and more heat is absorbed into the atmosphere and gradually lift up the surrounding temperature to the point at which ice in northern polar started to melt, causing the loss of habitats of nearly a hundred wildlife species as well as raising the risk of flood and other natural disasters. furthermore, toxic components from chemical additives resulted in soil pollution and water pollution.
After analysing the causes, I will propose two main remedies for this problem. Firstly, an improvement in current technologies should be thoroughly discussed and researched with the help of experts in all fields to decrease the level of pollutant. Along with the utilization of conventional sources like fossil fuels, we can apply available ones such as wind or solar energy which are renewable and immensely sustainable. In this way, we will be able to lower the rate of gas emission into the air and boost the efficiency of the whole process. Secondly, raising awareness of consumers is recommended. In our modern yet materialistic world, the chase for profit of factories and companies has always been a prevalent story. Big companies have tendency to seek for many ways to lessen the cost of disposal treatment. For instance, Ajinomoto, a Japanese food additives factory released a billion cubic meters of waste water into the nearby river instead of hiring specialized team to work on these waste, making the environment deeply damaged. In this way, if we can heavily charge and impose strict rules for manufacturers and ask buyers to ostracize labels similar to this, we will be able to effectively warn those kinds of activities.
In conclusion, industrial disposal from manufacturing consumer goods are main factors that contributed to the increasing rate of environment damage and we can solve this problem by upgrading technologies and raising awareness of consumers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 701, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Furthermore
...k of flood and other natural disasters. furthermore, toxic components from chemical additiv...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 17, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd raising awareness of consumers.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2142.0 1615.20841683 133% => OK
No of words: 410.0 315.596192385 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2243902439 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87914923153 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 176.041082164 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60487804878 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 506.74238477 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.0846110251 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.0 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1176470588 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.35294117647 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237235260221 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649303912144 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611786409846 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15356254156 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0568430577417 0.056905535591 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.87 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 78.4519038076 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.