In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What is your opinion on this?
Nowadays, engaging children in some paid work in many nations has been receiving a great deal of media attention. Many people think this as exhaustively wrong whereas others consider it is important for learning and taking responsibility from the valuable work experience. I personally think both education and job are necessary for children’s success. Children join in many paid work is similar a coin, which has two sides.
On one hand, children must be educated firstly, so that children may be exposed every subjects such as Maths, Physic, Social, etc. So when they grow up, they can choose the right way to do what they like best, and using this knowledge to create miraculous magic.
On the other hand, engaging paid work with a poor kid is very important for taking responsibility. His circumstance compels him to join in paid work such as dishwashing up, peddle, etc, which is not suitable for children . This paid work takes a lot of time and efforts so kids do not have any time to do their homeworks, even fall the exams. From this reason, give up one’s study situation is becoming serious day by day.
In conclusion, on the whole, based on above discussion, From my perspective, I think children should join in engaging paid work cause it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility but there must be a connection with education to get a suitable job in the future.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, may, so, whereas, i think, in conclusion, such as, on the whole, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1183.0 1615.20841683 73% => OK
No of words: 241.0 315.596192385 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90871369295 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79662937326 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.597510373444 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 359.1 506.74238477 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.0382982576 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.545454545 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9090909091 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.36363636364 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.409021043658 0.244688304435 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157783676265 0.084324248473 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115361300855 0.0667982634062 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245554012635 0.151304729494 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136355302947 0.056905535591 240% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 62, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ildren in some paid work in many nations has been receiving a great deal of media...
^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s similar a coin, which has two sides. On one hand, children must be educated f...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...knowledge to create miraculous magic. On the other hand, engaging paid work wi...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 227, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... etc, which is not suitable for children . This paid work takes a lot of time and ...
^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ation is becoming serious day by day. In conclusion, on the whole, based on ab...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, may, so, whereas, i think, in conclusion, such as, on the whole, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1183.0 1615.20841683 73% => OK
No of words: 241.0 315.596192385 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90871369295 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79662937326 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.597510373444 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 359.1 506.74238477 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.0382982576 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.545454545 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9090909091 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.36363636364 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.409021043658 0.244688304435 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157783676265 0.084324248473 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115361300855 0.0667982634062 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245554012635 0.151304729494 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136355302947 0.056905535591 240% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.