In many countries, people now wear Western clothes (suits, jeans) rather than traditional clothing. Why? Is this a positive or negative development?
Many countries have witnessed the popularity of Western clothes in every single corner of their citizens’ lives, which causes the fear of potential replacement of traditional clothing. From my perspective, it can be considered to be an apparent progress for some reasons detailed below.
It is undeniable that, in comparison to traditional outfits, the western ones, with comfortable materials and an affordable price, enable people, regardless of their financial background, to purchase them. Some traditional clothes may not be made of skin-friendly materials, and their price could be higher than the average salary, so people could learn to wear western clothes as an alternative as a reasonable option for daily wear. Also, western outfits appear to dominate people’s everyday wear since the ways of dressing up with them are easy and capable, unlike the traditional ones. For example, it could take roughly 30 mins to wear a kimono, whereas putting on a T-shirt and jeans takes less than tenth of that time.
The popularity of western clothes also leads to another consequence: traditional costumes have become more adapted, in line with modern trends. Obviously, many fashion designers have been making great efforts to associate the old features with the new ones in an attempt to keep the traditional features from disappearing. For instance, in Vietnam, young fashion designers have been promoting their new design of “ao dai,” which is made of comfortable materials and used for many different occasions, such as Tet holidays, birthdays, dates, etc. In addition, modernizing traditional costumes gives them a better chance to introduce themselves to the world. Actually, this vision could never have been done if people had kept preserving their own traditional clothes in the old path.
All things considered, personally, I claim that the prevalence of western outfits is a positive development, since every benefit they bring to people’s lives is evident everywhere they come to.
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Suggestion: apparent progress
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, if, may, so, whereas, for example, for instance, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1693.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4089456869 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90776600587 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607028753994 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.8137404317 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.083333333 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0833333333 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.08333333333 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266041831893 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0926674035232 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0655362146153 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142505386461 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544841810104 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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