In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Does this trend have more positive or negative effects on the society?
It is reported that the number of the elders will account for more than 50% of total population in Taiwan in 2030. Some people think it is positive for our country, while I strongly believe it can have detrimental effects on our society.
A part of people argues that there are two problems. Firstly, too many older people can lead to the serious financial deficits. Governments need to spend a large amount of money on social welfare such as the residential homes for the elders who do not have family members. Also, the increasing older population consume the huge number of medical resources and governments have to plan another budget for the medical care centers for these older people. In fact, this money can be used to improve the development of technology and business instead of wasting on older people.
Secondly, youngsters can feel more stressful because they have to raise more unemployed older people. Compared with the past, young men nowadays live in a extremely competitive society. In particular, their job opportunities and salaries dramatically decrease because of the severe economic recession after 2008 financial crisis. Such a issue can indirectly have a negative influence on younger adults’ mental health. It is indicated by the research that most mental illness of young people are resulted from the stress of family responsibility.
In conclusion, the high proportion of older people can not only affect the economy in a country but also result in some social issues like young people’s economic burden.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, in fact, in particular, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1303.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19123505976 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77968901232 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.609561752988 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 416.7 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0248106483 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.230769231 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3076923077 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222374090289 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0716802235905 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485903928843 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125925917565 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0125029297244 0.056905535591 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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