many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which may cause many health problems. sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.
do you agree or disagree ?
In the post-industrialization era, consumers moved towards the unhealthy lifestyle. Its influence encouraged the manufacturing of food and drinks that has sugar content beyond the daily requirement of a healthy human being. Prices on such products has to be elevated in order to remind individuals on healthy eating habits. I consider, increasing the prices of the foods and drinks with high glycemic index is an ideal way to encourage people to have meals with less sugar and this essay intends to address this matter with supporting reasons and examples.
On the one hand, rapid industrialization gave capitalist’s an unimaginable influence in our modern society. While these food manufactuers started advocating on foods that suit the busy lifestyle of the person living in the cities, that’s how fastfoods restaurents emerged into our lives. These places are the primary source for the sugary products, that we consume daily. Whereas, on regular consumption of these items, people may develop a multitude of health problems. For instance, chronic metabolic diseases like type 2 diabetes, hypertension, obesity, affects people of young age . These primary diseases resort to further complication in the long run leading to hideous diseases like stroke and heart attack. Thus, by eating sugary items, people unknowingly lead a live that might cause so much physical, mental and social pain, and eventually leading to premature deaths.
To counter act the damages already done, health care workers and governments insist on making the sugary products expensive. The first measure would be increasing the tax on those products, this will definitely influence the purchasing capacity of the consumers. Secondly, governments should make laws that instructs the fastfood manufacutrers to increase the prices on the products which has high sugar content, in addition they should impose heavier fine on the companies who does not follow the government regulations. If not followed their license to manufacture food produce should be dismissed. On the other hand, the nutritional contents of manufactured products should be strictly regulated by some government aided insitutions. When these products becomes expensive, it will be a luxury commodity, thus all classes of people would think twice to buy them, which helps them lead a better quality life.
To summarise, strict restrictions on the high sugar food should be imposed, both in terms of increasing the price of the prodcut as well as implementing laws. Hence, it might be possible for people to live a life without being pestered by deadly diseases.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, whereas, while, as to, for instance, in addition, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2212.0 1615.20841683 137% => OK
No of words: 407.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43488943489 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98148441673 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 176.041082164 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611793611794 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 506.74238477 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9713095235 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.421052632 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4210526316 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15789473684 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28452856692 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.076732807779 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481678464905 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161911931503 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0525815288612 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.45 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 78.4519038076 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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