Many people believe that the increased presence of violence in films and television these days is responsible for the rising incidents of violent crimes among youths society. They argue that governments have a duty to control the media so as to reduce this phenomenon. Do you agree with this argument?
Youth violence is a problem that many people blame on the media, which they believe should be supervised by the government. I disagree with this idea and believe instead that society itself should fix this problem.
In today’s world, young people are influenced by many things, like television, films, and websites. It is thus unreasonable to accuse only movies of increasing violence. In other words, today’s youth come across all human behaviors equally, such as violence and kindness and greed and generosity. They can witness these things in one news broadcast just as much as they can in action movie. Thus, blaming the entertainment industry is not only unfair, it is also wrong because it ignores the root cause of these behaviors. To suggest that governments should control this, then, is to avoid taking responsibility for ourselves.
Indeed, a government should not act as parents to its citizens. It exists to ensure a society can thrive, not to tell people what to do. On the other hand, parents can and must control what their children see online, in movies, or any other source. Consequently, parents must decide whether they want their children to watch a horror movie; it is not a government’s job to ban a studio from making it. Once a government controls one sphere, it will be free to act in all areas of our lives because negative influences are everywhere and have always been so. Not only will government actions not stop violence, they will likely increase it as people fight for their freedoms.
In conclusion, violence can be triggered by many things, including, but not limited to media influence. Governments should therefore not be allowed to restrict what the entertainment companies produce because they will then have to spread their control to all areas of society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...it as people fight for their freedoms. In conclusion, violence can be triggered...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, so, then, therefore, thus, in conclusion, such as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1524.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81760339453 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573333333333 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 459.9 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.9997479828 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.25 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.75 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8125 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232501585049 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0735816413276 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051189797973 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144204754543 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00913428432441 0.056905535591 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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