Many people believe that the increased presence of violence in films and television these days is responsible for the rising incidents of violent crimes among youths society. They argue that governments have a duty to control the media so as to reduce this phenomenon. Do you agree with this argument?
Youth violence is a problem that many people blame on the media, which they believe should be supervised by the government. I disagree with this idea and believe instead that society itself should fix this problem.
In today’s world, young people are influenced by many things, like television, films and websites. It is thus unreasonable to accuse only movies for increasing violence. In other words, today’s youth come across all human behaviours equally, such as violence and kindness and greed and generosity. They can witness these things in one news broadcast just as much as they can in action movie. Thus, blaming the entertainment industry is not only unfair, it is also wrong because it ignores the root cause of these behaviours. To suggest that governments should control this, then, is to avoid taking responsibility of ourselves.
Indeed, a government should not act as parents to its citizens. It exists to ensure a society can thrive, not to tell people what to do. On the other hand, parents can and must control what their children see online, in movies, or any other source. Consequently, parents must decide whether they want their children to watch a horror movie; it is not a government’s job to ban a studio from making it. Once a government controls one sphere, it will be free to act in all areas of our lives because negative influences are everywhere and have always been so. Not only will goverment actions not stop violence, they will likely increase it as people fight for their freedoms.
In conclusion, violence can be triggered by many things, incuding, but not limited to media influence. Governments should therefore not be allowed to restrict what the entertainment companies produce because they will then have to spread their control to all areas of society.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, so, then, therefore, thus, in conclusion, such as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1529.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13087248322 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87270470513 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580536912752 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 459.9 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.2805716919 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 109.214285714 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2857142857 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78571428571 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236717302968 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0800465457689 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0495881205755 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145712204132 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0161547982214 0.056905535591 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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