Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed.What is the reason for doing this?Is this a negative or positive development?

Essay topics:

Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed.
What is the reason for doing this?
Is this a negative or positive development?

It is true that the ascendancy of children becomes a huge concern of parents , as a result, they are able to do everything as long as their children are successful. There are several reasons which can be put forward to explain why they often put too much pressure on their offspring, which has many impact of their children’s life.
There are two primary reasons why more people nowadays are putting their children into a big circle named pressure. Firstly, children are the future builders of the nation so educating children is always high on the country agenda, which gradually leads to many inhabitants’ misconceptions that their children are obliged to complete all of their tasks at the school perfectly if they want to have a good prospective career. Secondly, parents do not want their offspring to be fall under the pace of modern life and peers so they have to force such kids to study high and low or eventually take the extra-class if necessary.
However, this tendency could have negative consequences in terms of children’s psychoactive. Those who have to suffer from too much pressure have the capability of being depression or suicide. Namely, Koreans must witness students’ a number of suicide every year due to exam pressure. On the other hands, this phenomena also have many beneficial. First of all, parents can boost the enthusiasm of their kids to make every effort in studying and catching up with the lectures at the institution. Besides, pressure which is proposed by parents sometimes can be encouragement to move on their profession path easily.
To sum up, there are a number of reasons why more and more parents put too much pressure on their kids. As a result, this could be both negative and positive influences on individuals.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, as a result, first of all, it is true, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1486.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00336700337 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92037322849 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.5676967571 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.307692308 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8461538462 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6923076923 7.06120827912 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360305320115 0.244688304435 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126663493229 0.084324248473 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0679705851456 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241532995103 0.151304729494 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0671442930034 0.056905535591 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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