ou should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think it is better to work for different organisations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Many people are wondering it is better to work in one company or to experience working life in many ones. In this essay, I am going to discuss the two views and tell mine.
On the one hand, there are some benefits of working for a range of establishments. It would be interesting for employees to experience the diversity of working environment. This means that they would have advantages to learn new things that make their lives more vivid. Changing the work places also could be a helpful way for young people to explore what they really passionate about. For example, Van Anh, my 24-year-old friend, told me that she had just quit her second well-paying job at a bank and accepted an offer from a non-government organization because she realized that she loves helping others than earning a lot of money.
On the other hand, I believe that staying at the same company brings people with valuable career opportunities. By working for the same organization, persons could save a lot of time not spending to adapt to a new working environment, such as learning the internal rules. Instead, they would have enough time to have expertise in their professions. This would strongly impact on their opportunities to get promotion or be successful. As an illustration, according to survey data conducted by Vietnam Academy of Social Science in 2012, 85% of people, who work for the same companies or organizations in 10 years and above, hold high positions.
In conclusion, while many ones have several debates about if working in the same establishment is better than in different companies, I am convinced that staying at a constant place is the best choice for career to be developed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 503, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...her second well-paying job at a bank and accepted an offer from a non-government ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, really, second, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1409.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90940766551 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91329623922 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602787456446 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8078778132 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.384615385 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0769230769 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46153846154 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313234927075 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113964831361 0.084324248473 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0647364823627 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195653860474 0.151304729494 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0190172932791 0.056905535591 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.