One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages ?

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One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.
Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages ?

It is true that thanks to the achievements of healthcare, human today can expect to live longer. In my opinion, there are more advantages of this than disadvantages.

Living longer means that populations of a certain country are aging, which leads to some predictable drawbacks. Firstly, there will be more people are eligible to receive a pensions as they are at the age of retirement and less people in the workforce who working and paying income taxes. This might put a pressure on government budget. Secondly, the increase of those over the age of 65 is going to place a greater burden on health care systems.

In spite of the fact that there will be some challenges along with the issue of aging population, I believe that there are many advantages of an older generation in terms of social contribution. Pensioners are comfortable financially and find pleasure in giving back to their communities. In my home town, it is easy to find an elderly person who taking responsibility to manage a public hall or a non-profit library. Besides, as living longer, retired people play a significant role in preserving the morals and values of the community, such as love of family, respect for learning, resilience, etc. They are also willing to pass down their vast knowledge and hands-on skills to the next generation. It is just difficult to imagine a world without any elderly people.

In conclusion, I am convinced that the advantages of aging population issue prevail over the disadvantages.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 172, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a pension' or simply 'pensions'?
Suggestion: a pension; pensions
... be more people are eligible to receive a pensions as they are at the age of retirement an...
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Line 3, column 224, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...s they are at the age of retirement and less people in the workforce who working and...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in spite of, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1253.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99203187251 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95987783726 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.621513944223 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 404.1 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8082157057 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3846153846 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3076923077 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53846153846 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138746042477 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445118340291 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0392205324657 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0891634769174 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495536435246 0.056905535591 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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