Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case?
Do you think is a positive or negative development?
Nowadays, there are rising concerns about children wasting a significant amount of time on their mobile phones. There are some reasonable justifications to explain for this situation from both subjective and objective views. However, despite some positive points for this phenomenon, from my perspective, it emerges as a negative factor in people’s life.
First, there are several plausible explanations to account for the children’s sticking their eyes on smartphones. One of the most acceptable aspects to be taken into consideration is the increasing popularity of technology and modern gadgets, which creates a boost in terms of smartphone purchase and usage. It is indisputable that mobile phones, as well as technological devices, are achieving unchangeable positions in people’s lives, making many individuals struggle to control their time on screens on a regular basis. Another contributory factor to this pressing issue is the negligence of parents and families to educate and limit their children’s interaction with gadgets. To be more specific, a majority of elementary students are possessing their own smartphones, which facilitates and offers them the ideal condition to be dependent on their phones without any modification and parental surveillance. Moreover, the need to use technology for educational purposes can be considered as an objective cause for the ascending time that children spend on smartphones. To state that, due to the social distancing during the Covid-19 pandemic, children coincidentally get familiar with gadgets as their useful tools for studying, which certainly raises their time spent on smartphones daily.
Despite some of the merits when using smartphones, I personally believe this situation to be detrimental for children in particular. First and foremost, the mounting amount of time on screens can cause some serious health problems as well as mental illnesses in children. For instance, more and more young students are likely to suffer from visual disorders and autism as a result of uncontrolled smartphone usage. In addition, the longer time children spend on gadgets, the higher possibility of them encountering inappropriate information such as sensitive and sexual advertisements on the internet, which negatively influences their healthy mental growth.
In conclusion, the given situation can be plausibly explained by a number of aforementioned factors. Even though this may bring some educational benefits for children, I still firmly consider it an improper direction.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, incidentally, may, moreover, so, still, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in particular, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2167.0 1615.20841683 134% => OK
No of words: 379.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.71767810026 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20686758281 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577836411609 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 506.74238477 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3193736465 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.4375 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6875 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210986612536 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0733556784971 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0350529097981 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1366047112 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346754239617 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.0946893788 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 50.2224549098 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.19 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.36 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 78.4519038076 171% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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