In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
Nowadays, many people believe that it is virtual for teenagers to have a gap year to work or travel which existed when they terminated at high school and prepare for studying at university. Therefore, it has both pros and cons generally. In my opinion, the benefits should outweigh the drawbacks of this trend.
On the one hand, young people decide to work or travel for a year without studying for many reasons. Firstly, when they visit to many places, it is needed to have an amount of time to relax after finishing high school. Moreover, they can have valuable experiences and well-informed about cultures, famous places and people in there. Secondly, teenagers can earn a lot of money while they work for full-time jobs. Correspondingly, they can achieve many soft skills, which won't be taught at the university, help them have a perfect plus for their future job. Finally, young people have not to be depended on the financial burden of high cost of tuition fee at university. Many universities tend to make the profits by increasing the fees which includes the infrastructure, textbooks, facilities,... As a result, students are not able to manage for their poor standard to take part in studying at university.
On the other hand, students determine to have a gap year will meet with these difficulties. The process of achieving knowledge is slower than university students. They have not enough time to keep pace with students who always foster the will of being a successful person. In addition, it takes longer for young people to have a certain career. Besides, it takes much money to travel for accomodation, transportation, food, drinks,... instead of studying at university for a particular expense.
In conclusion, many young people choose for their oriental future according to different ways. It is not contigent on the traditional methods before. As well as they can develop themselves better, they are free to decide.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, finally, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1623.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05607476636 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88718331357 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557632398754 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7675144007 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.15 106.682146367 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.05 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.95 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290666524691 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0919367089658 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.09603615678 0.0667982634062 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18788761949 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420567762416 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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