Some people are fond of buying new gadgets, phones, or laptops. Is this a good or bad thing? Discuss your opinion.
The improvement of technologies at this century is skyrocketed. We can’t deny the impact it has made to our daily life. And with the development of new devices and gadgets, it seems that more and more people are keen on acquiring new hi-tech stuffs. From my point of view, this act can causes some problems to the industry, and here’s why.
First, the race of new phones and laptops is a bad way to burn the money. We can clearly see a lot of devices have a price tag of hundreds, even thousands or millions of dollars. But they are not made for one or two years to use, they are made for long-term use. For example, top-tier smartphones, more widely known as ‘flagship’ smartphones, are able to work smoothly up to 3 years. This future-proof rate for laptop is even higher, up to 10 years if use carefully. Furthermore, in recent years, the ratio of performance per dollar is getting lower, due to the slowness of chip architecture researches. A lot of companies, such as Intel, need funds to sponsor this work, and all they can do is to raise the price of their processors, therefore make it way more expensive, while can’t bring any significant difference compared to the last generation.
Next, too many new gadgets can cause dramatic problems to the environment. A common problem is people tend to throw away the old piece of tech once they get the new one. If these old devices don’t get disposed properly, components from these will make the environment become harmful. For example, batteries, made from lithium ions, can become an explosive bomb if suffer intensive heat. Metals, such as aluminum can make the ground contaminated, therefore reduce the soil’s quality. One more impact to the environment is the amount of waste. The average number of tech devices per person is 2 device. Imagine if all of them get thrown away, the number is so catastrophic.
In my opinion, the requirements to buy new gadgets and tech devices are not essential. Therefore, this should not be encouraged, due to its consequences.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 292, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'cause'
Suggestion: cause
...fs. From my point of view, this act can causes some problems to the industry, and here...
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Line 5, column 604, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'device' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'devices'.
Suggestion: devices
... number of tech devices per person is 2 device. Imagine if all of them get thrown away...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, while, for example, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1712.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 352.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86363636364 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95985100558 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579545454545 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.8581992391 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.5238095238 106.682146367 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7619047619 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09523809524 7.06120827912 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114876000369 0.244688304435 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0353570749524 0.084324248473 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463366207032 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.091643690659 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0525984504896 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.0946893788 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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