Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are
much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In today's era, there isn't agreement over the aim of college education. it is considered the university education targets at prompting graduates take up better careers while others hold the view that it brings about more benefits both in individuals and society. I will talk about them and show my own thoughts.
Some agree on helping students get better jobs, the aim of university education. For one, he or she will step into society and choose a job instead of staying in school as a student forever though it is unlikely to happen and sounds really ridiculous. So, getting a satisfactory job may be radical task for most students while studying at campus or graduating, which means the basic survival security and even achievements of one's own value. During the learning process in university, students are taught with professional knowledge and skills such as how to make the best of one has acquired to his or her own career, resulting in more expert elites in various fields covering all aspects of the world.
A different voice also exists that the impact of education is tremendously beneficial with a wider scope. Compared to the idea mentioned in the last paragraph, this claims a more significant role of campus education for it not only emphasises in the advantage for individual but also focuses on its social value. A good person to society my be the ultimate target, leading to a more vigorous, evolutionary and progressive world. With such an education, graduates will have a good command of professional knowledge and skills as well as the mission or duty they shoulder to build a better society, ranging from the regimes' systems to basic infrastructure. A successful education should shape one equipped with knowledge, critical thinking, social skills and more importantly, the mission or belief. university education will shoulder the task of forming the better graduates to society while their own personalities improved.
As far as I'm concerned, it is supposed to cover the scale from individual and society. The person is not a merely person but a social one, who possesses his or her unique task in a family, country and even the world. Thus, education should influence more positively on graduates with a wider scope.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, really, so, thus, well, while, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1887.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 373.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05898123324 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84024945051 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549597855228 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.967145953 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.9375 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3125 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 7.06120827912 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236200182473 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805099386694 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0929026383829 0.0667982634062 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144916387967 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.057643876817 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.