Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is believed by some people that if children are allowed to make their own decision on food, clothes and entertainment, then it is likely to result in a society of self centred individuals. Whereas, others opine that it is vital to allow children to make their own choices about matters that impact them. In my opinion, I agree with the former point of view.
On the one hand, people who argue that it is necessary for children to make decisions about their everyday matters think that this will result in making children independent. Allowing children to make their own decision will improve their decision making skills which is important for them in future. This way they learn from their mistakes and make smart decisions in the future. This makes children independent individuals. If children depend on others for their daily matters, then they cannot make their own decisions in the future as they depend on others for that who may not make good decisions on their life matters such as employment and education.
On the other hand, people who support that allowing children to choose whatever they want on daily matters will result in a society of selfish individuals think that children are not good at making decisions. Many children do not know how their decisions influence others’ lives. So, they only take themselves into consideration while making decisions. For instance, children might wear any dress to their schools which might not be suitable for that school. They might buy expensive clothes or expensive electronic devices such as smart phones which their parents cannot afford. This will lead to unnecessary expenditure of their parent's income. They might choose to eat junk food which is unhealthy for them. This will result in unnecessary expenditure of their parents’ money on their health treatments.
In my opinion, children should not be allowed to make their own decisions as it will result in a society where everyone thinks only about their desires.
In conclusion, it is not good to give freedom of choice for children on their everyday matters as it will result in society where people fight among themselves.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 193, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... a society of self centred individuals. Whereas, others opine that it is vital to allow...
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Line 2, column 291, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...king skills which is important for them in future. This way they learn from their mistake...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, then, whereas, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 54.0 24.0651302605 224% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1807.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06162464986 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55362037473 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.434173669468 0.561755894193 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 540.0 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.8309410713 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.388888889 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8333333333 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.4897476692 0.244688304435 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.173873309034 0.084324248473 206% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12981348798 0.0667982634062 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.329265321037 0.151304729494 218% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0923301151533 0.056905535591 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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