Some people believe that government money should be spent on important things rather than arts such as painting and music. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is believed by some that governments should spend money on vital sectors instead of arts. While it is necessary to prioritize expenditure on education and healthcare, I would argue that funding painting and music is also worthwhile.
On the one hand, the government should spend its budget first on schools and hospitals in order to guarantee primary rights of inhabitants. First, a majority of citizens have a basic entitlement to education which could increase their employability when entering the labour market. If authorities do not focus on education, many people might lose the chance to study, lacking necessary knowledge and job-related skills such as critical thinking or problem-solving. Second, since people basically need to have good health to work and enjoy their lives, the government is required to expand its network of healthcare centers so as to serve as many citizens as possible.
On the other hand, spending on arts also benefits individuals and the government. One reason is arts significantly contribute to people’s spiritual lives as music and painting bring about happy and satisfying moments for people of all ages. For example, listening to pop music is a shared interest of many youngsters, while people of a certain age have an obsession with charm music. As a result, the funding for building theaters or galleries could allow more citizens to have the chance to enjoy their hobbies. Additionally, the leisure industry has experienced a dramatic boom in many countries these days. Support for the development of this industry is also a profitable investment when the government could collect more taxes.
In conclusion, while investment in education and hospital is the top priority, the government also need to allocate their budgets to music and painting to take care of spiritual lives of their citizens.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1558.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2813559322 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98239592194 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569491525424 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3846153846 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.846153846 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6923076923 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.84615384615 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176466375053 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061808897203 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555994258811 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112948380096 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0441727421506 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.