Some people believe that if a police force carries guns this encourages higher level of violence in that society To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

Essay topics:

Some people believe that if a police force carries guns, this encourages higher level of violence in that society.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

The gun ownership of policemen is a controversial problem among community because some people argue that it may lead to the increase of violence in the society. Although the violence could be emerged in some cases, I believe that policemen should be equipped guns to protect others and themselves as well.

The first reason I support the gun ownership of police force is that the gun is essential for a policeman to handle with criminals in emergency situations. Some criminals who are so dangerous, strong and difficult to handle will trouble the policemen when they are doing their mission so that the policemen need a gun for their own safety. Moreover, the gun given to the policemen is restricted usage, which is used just for specific situations and the policemen have to take responsibility for this property. Thus, the violence is not likely to occur when the police force follow the regulations of gun utilization.

Secondly, a policeman bringing a gun by his side might act as a warning for criminals not to do bad actions so that the violence and crime would reduce. In fact, if a criminal observes that a police has no weapon which can prevent him from committing crime, he will have motivation to do it. For instance, a robber is going to rob people on the street, he might stop his criminal thought if he is afraid of a policeman carrying gun can shoot him from a far distance. In other situation, if he assumes that he can handle the policeman without any weapon, he has higher chance to rob and injure people including the police.

To sum up, although it may be true that the policeman with a gun will cause violence if the gun is not used properly, I strongly support the gun ownership of police force. The gun would be necessary for the police force to protect themselves and the civilians.

Votes
Average: 5.8 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 221, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'protecting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'force' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: protecting
...would be necessary for the police force to protect themselves and the civilians.
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for instance, in fact, in some cases, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1501.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70532915361 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68248454096 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479623824451 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 26.7223377221 49.4020404114 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 125.083333333 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5833333333 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.91666666667 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145874649812 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633804713407 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0234275438018 0.0667982634062 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0939677636317 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.019643432905 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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