Some people believe that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Essay topics:

Some people believe that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages

together.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Music is loved by most of people. So that is easy way together people at one place with different culture and different ages. However music is not only one way to collect the people at one place there are many other ways those will discuss in my further paragraph.

Many people believe that music is break our monotones activity and it is also use a pure form of entertainment. We have seen at any place one want to collect people then music is one of the best option. Because music lover don't see age and culture they just enjoy the movement. For instance, in navratri music systems arrange to do garaba where everyone come at one place and enjoy dance and fun.

Even though there are different ways to meet people together. Firstly, travel destinations at where people come from different countries,age,region etc. For example dubai is now hottest tourist destination all around the globe. Secondly, some special day like nations Independence Day, national leader's birth/death anniversary. Because on those days people have chance to show patriotism among the nation. Recently my country India celebrated 15th august(independence day) on this day people come at on place and do rotation of flag. Because India is diverse country and so many religion are there , but on this day they meet at one place. Thirdly, some international concernt and summit. Where people have different age and different culture but meet at one place without inferiority complex.

By the way of conclusion, music is loved by everyone so music lover meet at one place but there are other options are there to gather the people.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, for example, for instance, by the way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1346.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9667896679 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73608464225 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523985239852 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 446.4 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.293881407 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.1764705882 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9411764706 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.01903807615 299% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263169910529 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100764553582 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688937258626 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167551802233 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542844794388 0.056905535591 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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