some people believe that the range of technology available to individuals today is increasing the gap between rich people and poor people, while others say that technology has the opposite effect. discuss both views and give your opinion
Although a growing number of people feel that modernization is rising the gap between poor and well-off people, others, including me, agree that industrialization has led all humans to live better, even the deprived ones.
On the one hand, a group of people put forward three main arguments to support the idea that technology brings greater benefits to wealthy people. Firstly, technology improves the quality of life those people who live in developed countries. In other words, well-off citizens have more choices to purchase more variety of luxury goods which are produced by different companies. For instance, in 2018, apple, a well-known electronic company in the USA, has produced a new version of apple cell phone with the price of over $20000. Therefore, this mobile phone will be affordable to those having enormous saving. Secondly, technological advances help people who live in developed countries work from home or from anywhere in the world. Also, they can do shopping online and have things delivered to their homes. Finally, in trading, richer countries have a better access to the latest technology of e-commerce, while the poor ones, higher expenditure avoids them to compete with former and the globalization has increased the gap between the developed and underdeveloped nations.
On the other hand, I personally agree with those believing that technology has had more positive influences on both rich and poor people. One important impact is that all nations have a better access to developed healthcare and education. For example, in Africa the technology of MRI which is used for diagnosing of diseases can be compared to the one which is being used in the USA. In addition, the internet is spreading to all parts of the world. In the past, only people in developed countries had access to world-class libraries, but now the Internet gives everyone access to the same information which leads to greater equality.
In conclusion, some people believe that the technological advances provide better living conditions for wealthy people. However, I personally agree that this can influence on the poor’s lifestyles and have been improved for significantly
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1836.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27586206897 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86263438998 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551724137931 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.6284805122 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.75 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4375 7.06120827912 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234484919207 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743556050823 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0744995486475 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14611679627 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0188034162 0.056905535591 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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