Some people feel that there is too much emphasis on getting an education and that governments should spend money on leisure time activities for young people too To what extent do you agree or disagree

Education has always been considered the main activity of student, while some believe government should assign budget to evolve free time activities for them. I mostly agree with this statement and I will describe my reasons now.
On the one hand, education plays a vital role in the future profession of students. If they have appropriate education, they could easily join to the job market. Thus, emphasis on education would ensure the future life’s teenagers. Moreover, having an educated society could avoid recession and economy’s enhancement would be a reasonable outcome.
On the other hand, we could not neglect the impact of leisure time activities on children. These activities could broaden mind’s abilities like creativity and critical thinking, which not only may be beneficial in their education, but also have advantages for their future life. Furthermore, sticking to the education without considering time for fun and rest may cause mental illness. To cure these diseases, if possible, society would waste money and time. The period of curement would have been used for production and work if they had dedicated a portion of their time for leisure activities. Thus, spending time and money for leisure time would indirectly benefit students’ education.
In my point of view, I mostly agree that government should maintain money to boost leisure time’s activities of students. Having fun could refresh students to study harder than before. In addition, by teaching some skills in the leisure time, students may find their perfect jobs. For example, by learning some musical instruments, one may decide to follow music professionally.
In conclusion, although education is important for the future life’s students, we could not ignore the importance of free time’s activities. These stuff could enhance mind’s abilities and prevent mental disease. Thus, I moderately agree that government should spend their budget for leisure time activities for young people.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, thus, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 7.85571142285 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1690.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48701298701 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73764262296 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555194805195 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.3075153939 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.9473684211 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2105263158 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21052631579 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255726040592 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0873686500529 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0781463616564 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157708695778 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477372724653 0.056905535591 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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