Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is often argued that expanding the number of leisure amenities is the most
appropriate way of boosting the health of the general public, while others feel that
this is not a viable solution and believe other steps are needed. This essay argues
that although more sports complexes would be more convenient, education is a
more suitable option.
On the one hand, a greater availability of recreation facilities would make exercise
more accessible to citizens. People would have to travel shorter distances from work
or home and this would encourage more people to participate. Moreover, the
demand for each facility would decrease so people would have to wait less time to
use them. For example, in Dublin there are very few tennis courts and people have
to book weeks in advance of playing. However, for most people it is not the lack of
sports facilities but the lack of knowledge that is the problem.
On the other hand, a public awareness campaign about the dangers a sedentary
lifestyle can have on one’s fitness, would not only affect people’s wellbeing but also
their understanding of the issue. This is because most men and women are unaware
of the harm they are doing to themselves by not exercising regularly and warning
them about the risk factors would have a motivating effect. For instance, the ‘Go
walking’ campaign in Northern Ireland in 2006 led to obesity related illnesses, like
heart disease and stoke falling by almost a half. This essay believes these initiatives
would be more prudent than increasing the availability of sports facilities.
In conclusion, although an increased availability of sports centres can influence the
wellness of the public by making exercise more convenient, it is only through
education that the real benefits can be realised.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 47, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...riate way of boosting the health of the general public, while others feel that this is not a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1552.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27891156463 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76427464425 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56462585034 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1503430829 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.333333333 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.16666666667 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 23.0 4.38176352705 525% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24196459336 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0872789979507 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050062325742 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0628916703891 0.151304729494 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487323833906 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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