some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.Discuss both these views and give yo

Essay topics:

some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

The advancement of public health in today's society could bring positive impact for the human's life. It is believed that the majority of civilian can gain a healthy life goal through the presence of various sport facilities, while others may say that such availability is not recommended due to its less impact for the society. However, I essentially believe that sport facilities are essential in advancing public health.

First of all, being a person with healthy life could not be gained without the role of various sport facilities as the body needs different treatments. As a matter of fact, many successful persons such as Arnold the key actor of Terminator movie and Aderai as Indonesian famous instructor have shown society how life could tremendously changed through daily working out in both gym or home. Therefore, providing certain sport facilities to obtain good body shape or even the healthy body healthy life is considered by some people as premiere need.

In addition to that issue, others come with critique that sport facility has no impact for the society. It is argued that instead of adding more sport facilities, providing a land for less fertilizer food is the way to gain the so called public health. The evidence on how people could live more than a hundred year in both China and Indonesia have shown some people that eating healthy food with less fertilizer or chemical substances is desirable for them, being healthy is not about sport facilities but it is all about food in which digested by human's body system.

To Summarize, healthy life requires sort of needs which are different from one to another. Henceforth, I personally believe that providing and advancing sport facilities is still reasonable due to the nowadays trend.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'humans'' or 'human's'?
Suggestion: humans'; human's
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Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'change'
Suggestion: change
...own society how life could tremendously changed through daily working out in both gym o...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l reasonable due to the nowadays trend.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, while, in addition, sort of, such as, as a matter of fact, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1476.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05479452055 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61184420587 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534246575342 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.8453771172 49.4020404114 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.181818182 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5454545455 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8181818182 7.06120827912 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165720653692 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0720085112193 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550025608436 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100681928255 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0679571597549 0.056905535591 119% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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