Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
It could be widely said all over the world that music is an essential way of bringing people who are in different cultures and at different ages together. Furthermore, in my opinion, I strongly agree with the statement for the following reasons.
To begin with, one of the most valuable points about music is that it has a powerful effect when we try to understand other cultures. It is generally difficult for people to figure out other cultures (except for their own culture) because there are different customs of the ways of lifestyles, foods and clothing. On the other hand, people can feel the atmosphere of music. For instance, the Japanese cannot have enough understanding of the meaning(s) of Korean music, but many of the recent young Japanese, especially women, like to listen to Korean Pop. They can share the feeling with Korean people to listen to the rhythm and tempo. In some cases, women who really love it study the Korean language and sometimes go to Korea to meet their Korean friends. At that time, Japanese women spend a special time because they are able to talk about their favorite songs which they love with Korean friends. Specifically speaking, they attend a live concert together and have a fantastic time feeling the live songs directly.
Moreover, one of the critical points I want to discuss is that people do not need money when they just enjoy music. In other words, everyone from children to elders beyond the generations can have a good time listening, singing and playing music together. For example, in my country, Japan, there are several music festivals at the end of the year and people watch not only live concerts but also the television shows. In my case, I usually go back to my hometown and watch a TV show with all of my family members, including my son and my grandmother, which consist of four generations. We all really have an enjoyable time watching and listening to the various kinds of music from animation songs for children to old traditional songs for elders. Notably, we have some common songs for every Japanese, which is so famous that everyone knows and can sing. Therefore, music is one of the greatest excellent tools to communicate with each other and share the enjoyment beyond generations.
In conclusion, I definitely believe that music is one of the best ways to bringing people of different cultures and ages together. Music is able to connect not only people who have different cultures through songs but also people who are in different generations such as children and elders through commons songs.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, really, so, therefore, except for, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in other words, in some cases, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 41.998997996 162% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2149.0 1615.20841683 133% => OK
No of words: 439.0 315.596192385 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89521640091 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54742635268 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480637813212 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 672.3 506.74238477 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.5072655122 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.105263158 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1052631579 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6315789474 7.06120827912 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242557765019 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0857460502185 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0674410154116 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183663160321 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574538005517 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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