Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Essay topics:

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

All over the world, it could be widely accepted that the loss of particular kinds of species such as plants and animals is the major environmental problem in recent times. On the other hand, it could also be said that other environmental issues are more critical. In this essay, both of these views are suggested, and I would like to explain my opinion that the latter statement is more dangerous.

To begin with, everyone would agree with the idea that it is crucial to protect the natural environment, including plants and animals which live there. However, many kinds of species face endangered situations and the extinct stages, unfortunately. If they died out of the world, people would lose precious opportunities to research them. For example, in Africa, there is a particular spider, which has an incredibly strong string. If researchers could invent the artificial string referring to it, people could get a great chance to innovate the world. However, if these valuable species should be lost, we could not research it forever afterward.

By contrast, other people express that there are other vital problems in the world. For instance, the greenhouse effects are more valuable because some islands could not continue to exist when the sea level rises. In this situation, not only people who live in these islands but also plants and animals there would lose their home countries. In addition to the fact, people in the islands have to leave their home countries but it would be impossible to do so. However, all plants and animals cannot react in the same way as people. In that situation, we would lose most kinds of valuable species on the islands.

In my opinion, the latter problem of the greenhouse effect is more dangerous. If human beings lose these islands, we cannot see these species eternally. Furthermore, we have no idea if people in these islands could go to other countries. Moreover, we could not imagine the sadness which people would experience from the loss of their home countries.

In conclusion, this essay discusses two points of view about environmental problems. One is about the loss of livings and the other is another problem such as the greenhouse effects. Due to the above points of view, I definitely agree with the latter statement and the green-house effect are the most urgent problem to be solved as soon as possible.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 176, Rule ID: MANY_KINDS_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'species'?
Suggestion: species
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, in the same way, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1989.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 398.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99748743719 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61423920289 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472361809045 0.561755894193 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 604.8 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.8352401478 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.4090909091 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0909090909 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.13636363636 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249661044789 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0764281211663 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485003179341 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155410230139 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.059438165137 0.056905535591 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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