Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

| agree with this topic. In my opinion | think that music can join anypeople who has different
culture together, Music can make a relationship between people all around the world. Although it
has different rhythm but when the people who listen to music, their feeling will be better. For the
example the woman who will be mom in the future she can use music to join between mom and
her baby. | have known about how to make the patients fee\ better and some cases of the patients
in the hospital, the doctors will use music for them. When they patients listen to music (solf music)
it makes them feel better. And now we don't use music only human we can use it with animals and
plants too.

Music can make us feel better, although we are different ages, nationalities and culture. when we
like the same kind of music, We can join and listen together. One more example | have friend and
he is the foreigner. He is around 25 years old. He likes to go anywhere with me and he likes to
listen Thai song, especially song for life. He tries to practice to sing Thai tong and he can do it.
Now he can sing many Thai songs.

Including { think music has some power to make human's mind. And it can make good relationship
between people who had different ages, cultures and nationalities.

Votes
Average: 2.5 (3 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...en Thai song, especially song for life. He tries to practice to sing Thai tong and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, kind of, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1066.0 1615.20841683 66% => OK
No of words: 233.0 315.596192385 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57510729614 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90696013833 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26569956841 2.80592935109 81% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 176.041082164 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523605150215 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 324.0 506.74238477 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.6712059217 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.625 106.682146367 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5625 20.7667163134 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.1875 7.06120827912 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 14.0 4.38176352705 320% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188392272385 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0724998660237 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.067350404415 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0796549962075 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0645538398567 0.056905535591 113% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 13.0946893788 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 50.2224549098 148% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 11.3001002004 57% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.69 12.4159519038 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.7 8.58950901804 78% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 78.4519038076 45% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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