Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their
free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the
individual teenager and society as a whole.
Some people argue that young people should work on a volunteer basis, and this can
be beneficial for both the individual and society as a whole. However, I do not agree
that we should therefore force all teenagers to do unpaid work.
Most young people are already under enough pressure with their studies, without
being given the added responsibility of working in their spare time. School is just as
demanding as a full-time job, and teachers expect their students to do homework and
exam revision on top of attending lessons every day. When young people do have
some free time, we should encourage them to enjoy it with their friends or to spend it
doing sports and leisure activities. They have many years of work ahead of them
when they finish their studies.
I believe that society does not gain anything from obliging young people to do
unpaid work. In fact, I would argue that it goes against the value of a free and fair
society to force a group of people to do something against their will. Doing this can
only lead to resentment amongst young people, who would feel that they were being
used, and parents, who would not want to be told how to raise their children.
Currently, nobody is forced to volunteer, and this is surely the best system.
In conclusion, my view is that teenagers may choose to work for free and help others,
but we should not make this compulsory
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, may, so, therefore, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1164.0 1615.20841683 72% => OK
No of words: 246.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73170731707 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96035189615 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31410450247 2.80592935109 82% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569105691057 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 339.3 506.74238477 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.1602930291 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.818181818 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3636363636 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.09090909091 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 18.0 4.38176352705 411% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.467734422605 0.244688304435 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165808269144 0.084324248473 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0753697910935 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130873000073 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0630119397761 0.056905535591 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 50.2224549098 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 78.4519038076 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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