Some people think that the best way to reduce time spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Since traffic jam has recently become a pressing problem which negatively affects the time spent on travelling to workplace, replacing all parks or gardens with modern skyscrapers is a contemporary solution. However, some people still disapprove with this common issue. Personally, although there are reasons that advocate the first point of view, my firm conviction is that there are several alternative ways which can be effective adapted to tackle this alarming problem.
On the other hand, I understand why many people of the fervent conviction argue that the demolition of recreational facilities is inevitable in terms of saving commuters’ time. To begin with, workers have more opportunities to focus on their careers’ performances. Additionally, instead of wasting time transferring to remote working’s locations,such an emergence of close companies may provide workers with more time to enhance their work’s productivity, leading to the overall success of organisations. Moreover, it is the contemporary society that work-related requirements should be priortised.Additionally, humans consider workplace as a more important facility to gratify the daily burden compared to a leisure destination like gardens. Hence, there is no hesitation in demolishing a park or a garden.
Despite the factors described above, I believe there are several reasons why many people disagree with this statement. Firstly,the dangerous situation of environment is what the setback of demolishing gardens or parks is all about. If the plan of damaging public parks is not considered thoroughly, the balance between nature and society will be negatively affected due to the loss of plants. Hence, the emergence of air pollution comes as an expense and threatens people’s lives. Moreover, such an increasing use of public transport also plays an impressive role in reducing this adverse issue. In addition, it is the preference of private cars that commuters experience traffic congestions on a daily basis, resulting in the waste of time. Consequently, if government encourages residents to travel by buses or trains on a daily basis, the problem can be tackled effectively as there are more space on roads.
Taking everything into consideration, although there are many positive impacts related to damaging public places such as gardens or parks, I believe this measurement causes many environmental problems. Therefore, government should encourage citizens to focus on other effective solutions.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, in addition, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.3376753507 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2127.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 375.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.672 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29194140626 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 683.1 506.74238477 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.5980584063 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.117647059 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0588235294 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.64705882353 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203389626645 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590259460313 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403623892588 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113282911256 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0509607972747 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.61 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.24 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 78.4519038076 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 345, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , such
...ansferring to remote working’s locations,such an emergence of close companies may pro...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 598, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Additionally
...lated requirements should be priortised.Additionally, humans consider workplace as a more im...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 126, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...le disagree with this statement. Firstly,the dangerous situation of environment is w...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, in addition, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.3376753507 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2127.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 375.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.672 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29194140626 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 683.1 506.74238477 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.5980584063 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.117647059 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0588235294 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.64705882353 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203389626645 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590259460313 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403623892588 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113282911256 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0509607972747 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.61 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.24 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 78.4519038076 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.