Some people think children‘s spending time on TV, video and PC games is good, while others think it is bad. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
Recent years have seen a rapid increase in the popularity of electrical appliances, as a consequence of technology explosion. So, it is quite unsurprising that children from all over the world tend to experience more TV, video and PC games in their leisure time for relaxation. However, others suppose that taking those electrical devices deeply into the life can cause severe influence. In this essay, both above-mentioned arguments about using electrical appliances will be discussed clearly.
On the one hand, admittedly, the advent of electrical appliances makes children’s lives more convenient and flexible in all circumstances. Not only they support usefully for children’s study, but they still also help people be able to entertain themselves through their applications like watching TV, playing video game or listening to music via the Internet. What’s more, many people who are interested in science, geography, astronomy, history or even psychology can keep pace with the up-to-date news through specialized channels like Discovery, National Geographic Channel…From those evidences, it is completely reasonable that spending more time on TV, video and PC games have a positive impact on children.
On the other hand, some people argue that dealing with those electrical appliances in most of the children’s time can cause severe influence on their life. In particular, keeping in contact with those appliances can lead to their self-isolation from their surrounding environment over time. As a result, they may lose their ability of socializing with their friends and interacting less efficiently with the outdoor environment. Furthermore, some health issues can be likely to come to them at any time due to lack of doing physical exercises like autism, headache, sick building syndrome.
By considering the pros and cons of applying the electrical appliances in children’s life, I am of the opinion that despite the fact the children’s dependence on those appliances should not be ignored, they themselves can not have the overall development without those appliances and so, balancing the time between for study and for relaxation by using the electrical devices should be considered thoroughly.
To sum up, it can be stated that the electrical devices themselves hold a critical position in the process of children’s development. To overcome some problems caused by overusing them, they should be disciplined by themselves or their parents with the purpose of making the best use of them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, in particular, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 41.998997996 160% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2137.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 389.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49357326478 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10520267007 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 176.041082164 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565552699229 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 662.4 506.74238477 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.6110510453 49.4020404114 179% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.642857143 106.682146367 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7857142857 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78571428571 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15959660162 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058842989558 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0510971732837 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0917486982442 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464021667941 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.0946893788 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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