Some people think that everyone has the right to have access to university education and that government should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
It is true that ever intensified competition among individuals has been encouraging people to put more value on tertiary education. Some people argue that governments should provide free university education to all citizens. While I understand such action is reasonable to some extent, I tend to disagree with the opinion.
Admittedly, providing free tertiary education to all students possesses some advantages. To begin with, it narrows down the social and financial gap between the rich and the poor. Through providing an equal educational opportunity to every student, those who are from an impoverished family could expect to change their living conditions by finding a promising job, which reduces their gaps with other people. In addition, allowing students to acquire free education promotes the economic development. As universities are more capable of imparting professional and practical skills to students than high-school education, the number of capable workers in the labour market will tremendously increase, thereby stimulating the economic growth.
Despite the above merits, I believe free education is disadvantaged altogether. First of all, it impedes the development of some industrial sectors such as manufacture industry and agriculture sector. Because the public funds are largely allocated to support educational industry, other sectors may lose their driving forces to develop. Moreover, students may take the opportunities for study for granted if the high-level education is free to them. One piece of research conducted in India reveals that more than 20% of Indians do not cherish the opportunity to go to university because of the free education.
In conclusion, although free education may provide some positive consequences to both individuals and society, I am in support of the idea that it should not be free for everyone.
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Essay evaluation report
It is true that ever intensified competition among individuals
It is true that an ever intensified competition among individuals //'it is true' is a pattern beginning by a lot of users. You'd better not use it.
flaws:
1. verbs are repeated, look at the word 'provide', repeated 4 times:
Some people argue that governments should provide free university education
Admittedly, providing free tertiary education to all students
Through providing an equal educational opportunity
although free education may provide some positive consequences
need to learn more verbs.
2. most of the verbs are 'is/are' or 'may'.
need to learn more sentence varieties.
3. also you like to repeat those sentence structures:
providing free tertiary education to all students possesses some advantages.
allowing students to acquire free education promotes the economic development.
by finding a promising job, which reduces their gaps with other people.
will tremendously increase, thereby stimulating (which stimulate) the economic growth.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 283 350
No. of Characters: 1544 1500
No. of Different Words: 173 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.102 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.456 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.981 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.214 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.83 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.352 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.542 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.07 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 325, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'developing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'force' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: developing
...r sectors may lose their driving forces to develop. Moreover, students may take the opport...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, moreover, so, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1581.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58657243816 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04952524015 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614840989399 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2972795142 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.928571429 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2142857143 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07142857143 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244879256072 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0908746582642 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662965999314 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154122913627 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449874880142 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.14 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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