Some people think that intelligence is innate while others think that we can improve our intelligence through learning.
Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
No human can be born as the person who knows everything. Every human can think logically and effectively only after enough education. Whether a person have gift or not in one field only influence the learning effect. I more agree with the opinion that people can improve intelligence by studying.
On the one hand, people have to agree that some guys who are born with gift can learn thing faster than normal people and they may gain higher achievement in the future. In some area like sport, gene can decides whether a person is gifted in it. For example, jogging requires athletes to have good endurance, gymnastics and table tennis require flexibility. These are all determined by gene, which may explain why some sports are always controlled by certain groups. So some people believe gene also control and determined intelligence of human. Some student showed their literary talent from childhood, but struggling in solving math problem. And some people who have illness may gain problem even in reading simple words, and it is hard for them to get knowledge through textbook.
On the other hand, many people believe that education can increase intelligence. Firstly, people can only use their knowledge after they already learned it. Lots of examples have shown that people without education has no different with wild animals. Baby who raised by wild animal has lost their ability to learn languages. Some of them can learn language and show their intelligence after returning to human society, which prove the importance of education. Moreover, even for child who was born with learning disabilities, it is possible for them to gain knowledge and become intelligence through specific education, and Helen Keller is the best example.
In conclusion, I think the learning process are necessary for people to increase intelligence. Although gene is also significant, but human can still become clever by appropriate education.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 205, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'decide'
Suggestion: decide
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, so, still, for example, i think, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1636.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2268370607 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65118743639 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549520766773 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.9591768256 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.1052631579 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4736842105 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84210526316 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206861464541 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0716820727257 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061359314844 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134556164341 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256635359801 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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