Some people think that outdoor activities are more beneficial for children's development than playing computer games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
With the current technological onslaught comes a technological issue in children education: computer games. Some people argue that the role of computer games for children is still too vague and thus, should not be given precedence over outdoor activities. Nevertheless, from my standpoint, while children certainly benefit from physical activities, digital gaming also proves its worth in several aspects.
The merits of outdoor activities can be seen easily first in terms of children’s health. As today children often spend most of their daytime at school, the open-air settings of outdoor activities will act as an effective antidote to their schoolwork pressure. With further physical outdoor activities from simple sports like jogging, running to more complex ones like hiking, camping, children are able to augment both their physical and mental health, uplifting their overall mood and learning productivity. Another conspicuous benefit lies in the networking expansion. When participating in outdoor activities, children will have opportunities to meet with other people of different backgrounds. Therefore, children’s face-to-face communication skills can witness significant improvements, which assists them to form a more intimate network of friends.
With that being said, it is rather short-sighted to completely downplay computer games. In certain ways, computer games can promote students’ creativity and logical thinking. Currently, many state-of-the-art games have such sophisticated gameplay that players must utilize their brainpower and ingenuity to conquer these games. For instance, some computer games often negatively associated with unenviable reputation among parents such as League of Legends or Battlegrounds require children to develop innovative yet efficacious team strategies to gain the ultimate victory. Furthermore, computer games can enable children to create virtual networking. Today computer games have achieved huge popularity to actually become a networking platform in which children can make friends with different people from numerous backgrounds but sharing the same interest: computer game. Hence, besides direct face-to-face network, thanks to computer games, children can also have circles of online friends and broaden their web of relationships.
In conclusion, both outdoor activities and computer games play a certain part in children’s development. The primary issue now shifts to striking the right balance between these two activities for children with a view to making the most use out of them.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, thus, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2194.0 1615.20841683 136% => OK
No of words: 368.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.96195652174 5.12529762239 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04625261747 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611413043478 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 659.7 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6702609792 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.888888889 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4444444444 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279552359242 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0951283012052 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639619765866 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183521900469 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0206492762774 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.29 12.4159519038 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 78.4519038076 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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