Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of the society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is a widely held belief that parents are the main factor help their child becomes a good member for community. However, some individuals argue that schools are the right places to teach children. From my perspectives, schools should consider this as their responsibility instead of relying on parents.
On the one hand, there are some reasons why family is solid support to shape qualities in children. Firstly, it could be recognized that children tend to mimic people around them, typically their parents. By that way, parents are considered as shining examples for their kid. Secondly, parents can organize helpful activities for their kids to develop good qualities in daily life. For instance, parents may teach their kids how to sharing loves to miserable situations by giving foods or donating for the poor.
On the other hand, other people, myself included, totally agree that children should be guided by their teachers to be good members of the society. One of the reasons this view is held is that parents do not have sufficient time to stay with their child regularly as they are employed or they may keep their child in hostels. Besides, the purpose of going to schools is education, so it definitely consists of behavior skills and knowledge. For example, children are required to working on a team or make a presentation, those activities help them to develop communication skills, enlarge relationships and so on. Furthermore, children have a chance to meet people from all walks of life so they gradually understand how to behave in an appropriate way.
In conclusion, although parents raise their kids at very young age to build their character formation, schools play an important roles in children orientation to become good people in the life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an appropriate way" with adverb for "appropriate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...they gradually understand how to behave in an appropriate way. In conclusion, although parents raise...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1481.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07191780822 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73261706117 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568493150685 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.9703226949 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.785714286 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8571428571 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4285714286 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249252945211 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0900617271441 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055850085809 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16045707054 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413336586665 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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