Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
In our recent world, people have been having a keen interest in children education, since children are the future of our world. Several people believed that the contest between children should be fostered, while others support an idea which is that children who are learned how to work together with peers become more advantageous adults. In my opinion, I agree partly with both viewpoints.
On the one hand, it is understandable why people foster contest in children. The key rationale in favor of this view is that the contest help to arouse faculties inside each child. If 2 children have the same goal and the prize is just given for the first person can touch the goal, they will try harder than normal to reach the achievement. For instance, it is clear to see in a tennis match, the first prize is just awarded for the winner who can defeat the competitor. Conversely, if the contest does not exist in children world, the attempt from children will be disappeared and children will never improve themselves in order to become a better person.
On the other hand, working together also plays a vital role in children education. We can conceive of a situation that in a team, members always contest with others, everyone wants to become the most valuable player in this team without the attention about the purpose of the team, this team will be broken early. A football team perfectly exemplifies this point. In a match, it is undeniable that a player cannot run from the start point of a football court to the endpoint in order to have a goal, instead of doing it alone, they have to pass the ball and connect well to the teammate to score.
In conclusion, children need to study both contests and working together with others to improve themselves comprehensively.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, first, if, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1470.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77272727273 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56869689615 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542207792208 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.5152840968 49.4020404114 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.076923077 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6923076923 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23076923077 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224108045384 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0804994246264 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650195643872 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141331277768 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0765794849123 0.056905535591 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 50.2224549098 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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