Some people think success in life comes from hard work and determination. Others think money and appearance are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion
People have different opinions about the causes of the achievement and happiness in life. Some people believe the mental factors such as diligence decide the success, other people think success is based on material factors like wealth. Personally, I agree that people can be successful because of hard work and determination.
There are two reasons why I support success depends on mental factors. Firstly, people can become the famous scholar or researcher through their hard work and wisdom. Various scientists with many remarkable scientific achievements such as Einstein or Tesla make use of their knowledge and spend much time on developing technologies diligently. Such the scientists make great contributions to human beings by their creative ideas and continuous research instead of money. Second, most successful entrepreneurs achieve their goals in business because they are not afraid of learning new things. Mr. Morris Chang, for instance, is the founder of semiconductor industry in Taiwan. His achievement comes from the hard work at his young age.
On the other hand, some people argue that become successful by their material and physical advantage. The super stars use their appearances to attract a large group of fans. Most actors actually can make money easily through their faces and do not need to have high qualifications. Also, people born in the rich families can be more likely to become successful in the future. The advantage of their family backgrounds can support the resources they need. It is reported by the statistical research of National Taiwan University that pupils who come from the rich family are much more than the students in poverty in top universities.
In conclusion, although some people can use money or appearance to achieve their goals, I still strongly believe mental causes are more vital than material factors for people’s success.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, if, second, so, still, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1602.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35785953177 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80710611564 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57525083612 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.1422744237 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2352941176 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5882352941 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76470588235 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261468475246 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0823497640504 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06773314283 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176606341828 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0756490371718 0.056905535591 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.51 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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