Technology had made recreational activities like listening music or watching films easier What are the advantages and disadvantages of this

Due to the rapid development of technology in the 21st century people are able to get a hold of portable entertainment devices and listen or watch films easier. Some people claim that it is beneficial while others ague that there are several drawbacks. The arguments on both sides of the issue will be examined carefully in this essay,

On one hand, portable entertainment devices have a great deal of benefits. To being with, these devices have versatile functions, from listening music to playing games, there is a vast variety of things to do on the gadgets. Secondly, it is quite portable. For example, if a student didn't complete their projects before class, they can carry their laptops on trains or cars and work on the go. These devices allow people greater freedom and flexibility.

On the other hand, there are numerous drawbacks. First of all, these devices are one of the main contributors to diseases nowadays. Patients pile up in clinics with eyesight problems, chronic headaches, back problems and hearing difficulties. Due to the fact that we spend our time in-front of a screen we are facing health problems. Moreover, there has been an increase in obesity since a growing amount of people spend their time eating in front of a screen and not working out. Furthermore, most people use electronic devices can become socially isolated. They spend more time on the internet creating an internet persona and superficial friends that they do not know what's going outside. So the art of physical communication has deteriorated.

In conclusion, my personal view is that there are more drawbacks that benefits in the later future. From my perspective, I believe that a growing population of gen-z and millennial are going to face life threatening physical or mental problems thanks to the devices.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (2 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1516.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05333333333 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77365382764 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603333333333 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.2707535892 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.1764705882 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6470588235 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47058823529 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0746003914954 0.244688304435 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0185541696136 0.084324248473 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458374449222 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.048440703556 0.151304729494 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586648526636 0.056905535591 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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