There should be strict laws banning people from taking photographs of people under 18 in order to protect young celebrities and the children of celebrities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In our modern society, having a private life is the right of everyone and some people are of the opinion that some strict laws should be imposed to protect young celebrities from taking photographs, with which I am in complete agreement.
Being famous nowadays means that celebrities are in the tabloids a lot and they are followed by the paparazzi everywhere they go because they are in the public eye which put a social pressure on famous children that they have to act in a certain way like their parents. For example, people think the Angelina Jolie girls have to be perfectly dressed like their mother. In my opinion, this is not fair on children. Furthermore, children have the right to be badly dressed or have a badly day like everyone else. Children are not well-behaved like older people in any situation, sometimes they get tired and bored so they start to cry. Certainly, no one likes a photo was taken in that position.
People say that, famous people should act as a good role model that have a positive influence on young people, but sometimes due to differences in lifestyle following children’s star does not a positive impact. In other words, when celebrities do not have privacy, people are informed the details of their lives, such as, what brand of clothing they buy or what kind of entertainment they have. So in this case, young people imitate their lifestyle. For instance, buying fashionable clothe like celebrities or even they like to do such a luxury entertainment that exactly children’s celebrities do. Therefore, low-income and poor families are not affordable to provide desires of their children.
In conclusion, although people are interested in child star and children of celebrities, it is more important to protect children, so taking photographs of children should be banned.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: You used an adverb ('badly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('day') instead of another adjective.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1525.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01644736842 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86825317894 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549342105263 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.4812703309 49.4020404114 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.307692308 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3846153846 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1538461538 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29366308362 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106591824465 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.082148720027 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215881889885 0.151304729494 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0728372543796 0.056905535591 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 9.78957915832 189% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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