TOPIC 4: Many criminals reoffend after they have been punished. Why do some people continue to commit crimes after they have been punished, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?
After being penalized, many criminals are released to go back to their normal lives but they still keep committing crimes. There are some reasons that lead to this issue, and I believe that some appropriate solutions can effectively address this problem.
Despite the positive aspect of being set free and having the opportunity to contribute to the community in a legal way, there are some factors that make some exprisoners break the law again. First, they are less likely to be accepted by the community. For example, when they apply for a job, they are more likely to be refused because their criminal history. Thus, as a result of being unemployed, they may not have a better choice than to go back to their old way. Second, they may not be willing or are able to work as a normal person with a legal job as it probably does not earn them as much money and they have to work hard too. Therefore, they can easily be enticed back to illegal activities, which may appear more lucrative.
However, there are some solutions that governments can consider in dealing with this problem. First, creating suitable job opportunities can reduce the unemployment rate of released criminals. This can make them feel more accepted and can make it easier for them to integrate into society. Second, governments encourage those people to retrain and upskill to make it easier for them to find work. For example, they can learn to fix cars or electrical appliances make some hand-crafted products, which can help them to appreciate the true value of work and of earning money.
To sum up, some ex-criminals reoffend because of economic and social factors, but governments and society can address this issue with some practical measures such as providing job opportunities for ex-offenders and helping them to retrain.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ortunity to contribute to the community in a legal way, there are some factors that make some ...
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...ties can reduce the unemployment rate of released criminals. This can make them ...
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...criminals. This can make them feel more accepted and can make it easier for them...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, may, second, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, such as, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1512.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94117647059 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65328888414 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3200930527 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.0 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8571428571 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27235736316 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100687088122 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428626786789 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170847874676 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0625706095913 0.056905535591 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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