TOPIC: In many countries, woman no longer feel the need to get married. Some people believe that this is because woman are able to earn their own income and therefore do not require the financial security that marriage can bring. To what extent do you agr

In many nations, females no longer sense the urge to tie a knot. Some folks think that women are not planning to wed, for the majority are financially independent and thus do not crave the monetary guarantee, which marriage can usually fetch. I completely agree with this idea. This essay will discuss firstly on how entering into marriage is economically valuable and secondly, why women are postponing marriage with relevant examples.

To begin with, as many women tend to suffer gender discrimination in the workplace with regard to their married lives, they typically receive a low salary as opposed to men. However, if a woman had successful marriage, the net income would boost monthly because the husband would supplement the wages that could make up a serious deficiency of an unmarried female. On the second place, obtaining a long-term car insurance is another crucial benefit of uniting with a male. Evidently, the coverage is exorbitant when a single individual applies for it, so wedded couples are able to save 526 dollars, which can bring sheer happiness, a month according to the recent analysis.

However, i strongly believe that the restoration of economic power in numerous states by women relative to men is the principle motive of females to give a low priority for getting married. For illustration, ladies are depositing personal savings in banks, shouldering heavy responsibilities of the family alone and granting loans, which means that they are self-reliant, financially stable and do not feel inner compulsion to become wives as to the previous times. Next, a significant surge in the literacy rate among females have landed them to numerous influential positions and the handsome wages that have granted women to curb their own reproductive health, subjecting to a substantial decline in the marriage rate. This ascertains why women are less likely to wed in various countries.

In conclusion, presumably, with the consideration of handsome salaries and great proficiencies, women do not feel necessity for fiscal freedom that the marriage oftentimes delivers the flexibility.

Votes
Average: 5 (3 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 372, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... which means that they are self-reliant, financially stable and do not feel inner...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, as to, in conclusion, to begin with, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1780.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31343283582 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94587092236 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 176.041082164 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635820895522 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.0141152294 49.4020404114 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.923076923 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7692307692 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.30769230769 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197020254512 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060028972039 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0286630965733 0.0667982634062 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108267783312 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298800609862 0.056905535591 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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flaws:
the second paragraph is out of topic. correct way:

1. introduction: yes, financial security is one of the reasons, but not the only one.

2. financial security for woman no longer feel the need to get married. first, second... //the third paragraph

3. however, there are other reasons. like: higher education, women's role change, society's more tolerance ...etc

4. conclusion.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 335 350
No. of Characters: 1732 1500
No. of Different Words: 213 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.278 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.17 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.869 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.769 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.356 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.311 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.535 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.026 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5

The topic is:
In many countries, woman no longer feel the need to get married. Some people believe that this is because woman are able to earn their own income and therefore do not require the financial security that marriage can bring. To what extent do you agree?

this topic only gives 'financial security' as the reason for woman's no longer feel the need to get married. but actually, there are more reasons. so we can do like:

1. introduction: yes, financial security is one of the reasons, but not the only one.

2. financial independence is absolutely one reason for not got married. for example, they have their own houses, cars, social actives, no difference to those got married...

3. however, there are other reasons. like: with higher education, woman will know their rights more, so women will be more independent mentally; women's role change, like: women can be president of a country; society's more tolerance for those women who never got married, or women can wait till the Mr.right coming...etc

4. conclusion.