“Traditional holidays are getting more and more unpopular among the young generations.”
Do you agree or disagree with the statement?
OR: what extent do you agree/disagree with the statement? Give specific reasons and examples for your argument so that any non-experts in the matter can understand that.
Different countries in the world create their own local culture, including traditional holidays when the remarkable events are celebrated and commemorated throughout the history of formation and development. It’s stated that nowadays there are many a people neglect and are not interested in these important occasions, especially the young generation. From my point of view, I completely agree that traditional vacations are becoming unpopular with the young-age group because of two reasons: some of these traditional holidays might be changed and buried in oblivion; and living in the too busy life and in the age of development of modern technology also lead to the apathy of individuals as well.
First and foremost, nowadays the meanings of cultural vacations are shifted dramatically and fallen into oblivion. In practice, some people may think that thanks to the progress of science and technology and economic development as well, the preservation and promotion of cultural traditions are becoming more and more easy. Obviously, the advancement of these excellent conditions has contributed to the positive impact on the maintenance of national culture. However, the disguise and oblivion of folk customs are unavoidable over time, especially the changing of traditional holidays’ meanings. In most cases, people tend to consider for other purposes of these important occasions instead of caring the actual nature of them. For examples, there is a lot of people taking personal advantages of these holidays when you can find soaring prices such as food prices, service fees and transport costs, …Also, sometimes people may participate in cultural activities because of current trends which are followed rapidly by the young generation like they crowd to go to the famous temples and trendy destinations or even conflict to each other to get the fortunes in Tet holidays. Therefore, the meanings of these cultural vacations are not kept completely intact as ever. Apparently, changing of the nature of traditional holidays is the reason why they are less popular among people.
Finally, people’s unmindful of traditional holidays is ineluctable because of the development of modern technology, especially in too busy life. Indeed, lots of individuals have difficulties in managing time in a day to solve their problems effectively, so they usually do not pay much attention to traditional holidays. Furthermore, the high technology, by which people usually release stress and become less tense, is becoming more and more popular. For instance, busy people who usually have heavy workload only care about how many break days in the traditional vacations without think of meaning and celebrating activities through these occasions. Specifically, lots of people expect the long break duration in Tet holidays to travel or discover famous destinations in stead of joining in traditional events. Also, people are often attracted by high-tech equipments by which they may spend more time in relaxing and entertaining. Particularly, nowadays children prefer spend their time in watching TV or playing video games to searching related information of traditional activities in cultural holidays. In a nutshell, living in a strellful and busy life with the advancement of modern technology are two important factors which lead to unpopularity of traditional holidays.
As discussed, the changing of traditional holidays’ significance and the rapid development of high technology evidently influence on people’s lives, on the way they think about these important vacations and on the level people pay attention on them as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Also
...ces, service fees and transport costs, …Also, sometimes people may participate in cu...
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Line 3, column 776, Rule ID: IN_STEAD_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'instead of'?
Suggestion: instead of
... travel or discover famous destinations in stead of joining in traditional events. Also, pe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, such as, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 10.4138276553 240% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 90.0 41.998997996 214% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 21.0 8.3376753507 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3097.0 1615.20841683 192% => OK
No of words: 557.0 315.596192385 176% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56014362657 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85807034144 4.20363070211 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08755894704 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 176.041082164 158% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.499102333932 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 993.6 506.74238477 196% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.0252343049 49.4020404114 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.85 106.682146367 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.85 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17209375766 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0520662519822 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0330633611611 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11052613255 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0169961546706 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 13.0946893788 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.15 50.2224549098 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 78.4519038076 187% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.5 9.78957915832 220% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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